Dear Reader
Beware this bag of treats!
Onomatopoeia poems may be delightful
Or frightful.
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Happy Halloween, everyone! This week, I started a new residency at Manor Woods Elementary School. I am having so much fun writing poems with the third grade students.
Our first workshop was on onomatopoeia poems. You can read my full lesson at this post (Apologies! Blogger ate my old post. I'm working on a new write-up of this lesson. Look for it this week). The model poem is Eve Merriam's "Weather."
We all described a place or activity, relying mainly on the sounds we hear to give the readers clues. Many students in Ms. Kaz's class thought trick-or-treating on Halloween would make a great sound poem. I agree!
These are very much first drafts. I have added minor punctuation and line breaks for ease of reading. The rest is all third grade poetry.
Halloween Poem
By Megan F.
Stomp stomp stomp.
running down the sidewalk.
Ring! Trick or treat.
Thank you
Chuckling ha ha ha!
Going house to house
When I get home
I rush upstairs.
Smelling the candy.
I sort and sort till it's done.
Crunch crunch crunch rip.
I leave a mess on the floor -- oops.
I feel lots of candy wrappers.
It's like I'm in a pound of candy.
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By Patrick B.
Shot! Stomp, stomp. Ding dong.
Trick or Treat! Drop, drop. Thank you!
Flash, flash. Talking.
Whoosh, whoosh. Lights.
Different dresses, scary, funny.
P.U. Chit chat. Branches moving.
Running fast. Thunk. Ouch!
Swish, swish, shadows,
decorations, pumpkins, parties.
Crack. Shot! Loud. Yum, yum.
Sour, sour. Ha ha.
Goodnight.
I hope you enjoy some delicious treats for Halloween. Thanks to the third grade team, students, and families at Manor Woods for giving me permission to share these poems. More student poems are on the way. Stop by next week for more onomatopoeia and opposite poems.
Thanks for the treats 3d grade!
ReplyDeleteI think these two captured the sounds beautifully, Laura. Thanks-glad you're having fun! Happy Halloween!
ReplyDeleteWow, such whiz bang poems. Love the energy and immediacy. Great job third graders!
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad you shared these, Laura! They are onomato-perfect! Sounds like your 3rd graders had fun.
ReplyDeleteHehe--I love the drop drop! These are great. Btw, there was no link to your complete lesson, which I'd love to see...
ReplyDeleteWhat a perfect starting off poem and what a great idea to combine onomatopoeia with Halloween! It's always fun to see your students' poems.
ReplyDeleteLove these 3rd grader poems, Laura. I think my favorite line is:
ReplyDelete"Crunch crunch crunch rip.
I leave a mess on the floor -- oops." =)
You really do get a feeling of movement and excitement with these poems. I like all the stomping, ringing, crunching, whooshing, and swishing. And "sour, sour."
ReplyDelete"Swish, swish, shadows"
ReplyDeleteWhat a delightful compilation of Halloween feelings!
Patrick's poem read like an animated movie script. I especially liked "Running fast. Thunk. Ouch!" My experience was a little more like Megan's, though. Especially that part about being in a pound of candy. :)
ReplyDeleteI always love seeing to see what these kids come up with under your tutelage, Laura! Would have been interested in reading more about your lesson plan as well... can you fix the link?
Laura, what great fun you must have had with the children. I was hoping to see the lesson plan as Michelle said so that I could share with the teachers I work with. Can you repost the link please.
ReplyDeleteHi, everyone. I'm so glad you liked the poems! Apologies about the link. The lesson I posted years ago has been eaten by Blogger. I'll write up the lesson this week -- look for a two-part post with additional student poems.
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