I have five minutes. Five minutes is not enough time to finish that chapter of my book (SKIN HUNGER, by Kathleen Duey) or go back to sleep. It is the perfect amount of time for checking Facebook.
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Facebook is where how I found out about the lunar eclipse. Friends across the country were waking their children up early and heading outside to view the Earth's shadow pass across the moon. At our house, it was just another early school day.
But I put the kettle on, got out my star-gazing binoculars, and slipped outside while everyone else went about their morning. This is what I saw...
This week's eclipse was a Blood Moon, named for its coppery color. Photo: EarthSky.Org |
Later that day, I was reading the "Poetic Asides" column in Writer's Digest. Poet Terrance Hayes -- a recent MacArthur genius award winner -- has invented a new poetic from. Using a line or lines from a favorite poem, use each word (in the correct order) as an end word in your poem. It's called a golden shovel, named for Gwendolyn Brooks' poem "We Real Cool" -- the basis for a golden shovel poem written by Hayes.
Writing Prompt: Write a golden shovel of your own.
Post your poem in the comments (making note of the poet/title of the original) and I will round up all of our golden shovels next week.
I like what Writer's Digest columnist Robert Lee Brewer says about this form. He calls it "a fun mix of found poetry and pure invention."
To capture the slow eclipse in the midst of my family's busy morning, I used Robert Louis Stevenson's "The Moon," from A Child's Garden of Verses.
Here is my golden shovel, followed by Stevenson's poem. (The words of Stevenson's poem are in gray.)
Eclipse, 5 am
by Laura Shovan
After Robert Louis Stevenson
Dark
October morning, the
Earth’s
shadow sweeps the Moon,
dissolves
its round cheeks until the Moon has
only
an icy smile. Next, it is the sliver of a
snowy
owl, mostly hidden, its white face
shrunk to one silver eyebrow. Cuplike,
it
holds the Sun’s reflection in its feathers. The
owl
swoops down when my kitchen clock
strikes
six, finds its roost below the horizon. In
moments,
sleepers will tumble down the
stairs,
their school shoes clicking in the still-dark hall.
The Moon
by Robert Louis Stevenson
What an interesting form. Loved that you were able to interweave your morning with your poem and Stevensons!
ReplyDeleteI like the combination of the old and the new in this form. Nice job with yours.
ReplyDeleteWonderful job, Laura! I missed the eclipse and your poem makes up for it :). Love that snowy owl with the silver eyebrow . . .
ReplyDeleteWow that is cool. I love your poem!! One question: five minutes is enough time to check facebook? In what universe? LOL
ReplyDeleteWhat a great new form and what a fantastic poem born from it! Beautiful job, Laura. Though I must agree with Andromeda-- five minutes on Facebook is pure lunacy! I'm going to give this form a try.
ReplyDeleteI like the moon as an owl with the sun's reflection in its feathers. Very cool, Laura! Neat form.
ReplyDeleteIt's a great challenge, Laura, love what you did with the end words, & love "shrunk to one silver eyebrow". That's gorgeous! Guess there's lots of love in this post for me because I love the Stevenson poem, too. He just makes it right so much of the time. Thanks, will try to find time!
ReplyDeleteSo, I found a favorite poem, & one line seemed to fit trying this out, Laura. Here goes:
ReplyDeleteThe poem is Loss, by Carl Adamshick
http://bit.ly/1xAtFzk
The first line must be about the wind,
in October, I feel the lifting
of the trees, lighter now without the leaves,
slipping like babies turning from
the breast, into sleep, nestled in mother’s branches.
Linda Baie © All Rights Reserved
I did have each 'end' word bolded, but obviously didn't work.
Wow, Laura, I've never heard of this form. Your poem captured this celestial event perfectly. I love the line: "holds the Sun’s reflection in its feathers". We had a boatload of rain/clouds during this eclipse - your poem helps me "see" what I missed. = )
ReplyDeleteLaura,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the "idea" of the golden shovel. It will be something fun to play with and to add to the bag of tricks. I like your use of "cuplike," but I think the golden shovel form encourages weird line breaks and does a disservice to the basic unit of a poem, the line. Maybe something like a noun rich haiku line would work better.
I liked Linda Baie's example except for that line ending in from--but that is just me.
Oh. what. fun! First, I'm sure I would take less to this if it had another name than "golden shovel," a poem and an image that I adore. Second, I love how your poem takes not only words but images from the RLS poem and transforms them. I think that's what would make these work best--not just a mechanical kind of borrowing but a thematic, modernizing homage.
ReplyDeleteAmok as usual, with panache!
Love your poem, Laura. The images are lovely - silver eyebrow and an owl's feathers turning, russet, was it? I do want to try a golden shovel poem! Maybe I'll choose a short first line to start!
ReplyDeleteYou did a fabulous poem with the challenging form. Nikki Grimes had a contest with this poem form. I still haven't tried it myself or with my students. WE should take the plunge. I was surprised by the eclipse. I didn't know it was happening until I let my dog out that morning. I watched it as I drove to the gym. I texted a naturalist friend to see if I was imagining it. He said he'd been up since 4. It was a serendipitous morning.
ReplyDeleteMy first attempt at a golden shovel failed miserably. I'm glad I gave it another go.
ReplyDeleteI used the third line of Adelaide Crapsey's "November Night." http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/175524
Fallen
Soft, mottled leaves, like
Grandma's hands, pause on the steps
at the threshold of
memory. A subtle passing,
in, then out, like distant ghosts.
© 2014 Michelle Heidenrich Barnes. All rights reserved.