THE LAST FIFTH GRADE OF EMERSON ELEMENTARY

THE LAST FIFTH GRADE OF EMERSON ELEMENTARY
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Showing posts with label teaching voice. Show all posts
Showing posts with label teaching voice. Show all posts

Wednesday, April 23, 2014

Source Poems: "The Singers"

For National Poetry Month 2014, I have invited 17 authors and poets to guest post about source poems. In this series of essays, each writer will describe a single poem's significance in his or her life.

Today, guest blogger Shirley Brewer invites us to join her in finding a poetic voice.

Shirley Brewer
I came late to poetry.

Granted, I considered myself a writer at age seven (fairy tales), wrote some poems in high school and college (Viet Nam, teenage angst), and used poetry with children in my work as a speech and language therapist in the Anne Arundel County Public Schools (Maryland).

Poetry became real to me on Christmas Day, 1996. I was visiting friends in Santa Cruz, California, and walked to the beach that morning with a notebook and pen.
When I returned, my friends asked me to read aloud what I had written. They pronounced me a poet and I agreed. I took two poetry classes at Anne Arundel Community College in 1997 that fueled my journey. Over these past seventeen years, I often included travel as part of my poetry studies, participating in workshops in various states, as well as in Italy and Ireland.

Ireland! In 1998, I spent two weeks in Dublin immersing myself in poetry under the guidance of Irish poets. Our guest for one session was Eavan Boland, who remains my favorite poet. That evening, she joined us at The Teacher’s Club, where she sat next to me and bought everyone at our table a drink. What a thrill!

Eavan Boland and students.
Photo: Shirley Brewer
The first book of Eavan Boland’s I purchased was In aTime of Violence, in which she explores the social and political realities of her Ireland. Her collection begins with “The Singers.” Here it is – 16 lines:

The Singers
By Eavan Boland

The women who were singers in the West
lived on an unforgiving coast.
I want to ask was there ever one
moment when all of it relented--
when rain and ocean and their own
sense of home were revealed to them
as one and the same?
                                    After which
every day was still shaped by weather,
but every night their mouths filled with
Atlantic storms and clouded-over stars
and exhausted birds?
                                    And only when the danger
was plain in the music could you know
their true measure of rejoicing in

finding a voice where they found a vision.

[This poem is published online at Stanford Magazine and Project MUSE.]

I connected with this poem in a completely visceral way. Every time I read it, I feel myself inside the poem. And I believe this poem has guided my own poetic path.

In the years I studied poetry what mattered most to me was discovering my “voice.” How would I find it? I read poetry voraciously. I still do–every day! One could become dizzy with all the voices! I began attending Peter Murphy’s annual Poetry andProse Getaways in Cape May. Excellent teachers. I slowly began to develop more confidence in myself as a writer. But did I have a voice?

To me, Eavan Boland’s poem speaks of the poetic journey–“an unforgiving coast.” Not an easy path. So much to learn, to read, to know, to weather. So much time not knowing if one is a poet at all. The desire to discover one’s “own sense of home.”

And always, it’s about filling one’s own mouth with words and sounds… “every night their mouths filled with Atlantic storms and clouded-over stars and exhausted birds.”

I often made the connection that–for 32 years–I filled the mouths of children with sounds. With my career change and early “retirement” in 2001, I realized it was time for me to focus on self-fulfillment, as risky as it was–like the dangerous weather of Boland’s poem. Time to follow my vision, to seek a more creative path. My journey brought me to Baltimore City’s Charles Village, to the University of Baltimore–where I earned my Master of Arts degree in Creative Writing/Publishing Arts in 2005–and to the vibrant poetry community that exists in Baltimore/Washington, DC/Annapolis and beyond.

I remember a poetry event at Maryland Hall in Annapolis a number of years ago. There was an intermission right after I read. I heard someone call out my name. It was the wonderful Philadelphia poet, JC Todd, who had been one of my instructors at Peter Murphy’s Getaway. She grabbed both my hands and exclaimed: Shirley Brewer, you have a voice! I’ll never forget that moment. It felt like such a thrilling validation. No matter what we surmise internally, it sure helps to receive external support. A moment to rejoice!

To have a poem inspire you early in your journey, and then serve as a companion all along the way, is the greatest of gifts.

And only when the danger
was plain in the music could you know
their true measure of rejoicing in

finding a voice where they found a vision.

Eavan Boland
from Poetry News in Review
Shirley J. Brewer graduated from careers in bartending, palm-reading, and speech therapy. She has served as poet-in-residence at Carver Center for the Arts and Technology in Baltimore County. Shirley will present "Healing Through Writing" with novelist Tom Glenn at the MWA Conference on April 26, and is scheduled to teach a poetry workshop at LitMore (Baltimore) in May. Recent poems appear in The Cortland Review, Little Patuxent Review, Innisfree Poetry Journal, Pearl, Comstock Review, Passager, and other journals. Her poetry books include A Little Breast Music, 2008, Passager Books and After Words, 2013, Apprentice House/Loyola University.

Thursday, June 6, 2013

Scenes from an Open House

Happy Poetry Friday and greetings from Gettysburg! This week, I'm attending the Gettysburg Review Conference for Writers, meeting great poets and studying with the wonderful Sidney Wade. (Check out her poem "Late.")

This week, my Northfield Poets celebrated their authorly accomplishments with an open house. Parents, grandparents, family and friends came to school to check out the great work.

Here are some photos from the event, along with a few more of the Northfield third graders' portrait poems.

Portrait poems on display in Ms. Hilliard's room.

Find the poem "The Adventurer" at this post.
Reading poems in Ms. Tavenner's room.
Poems on display in Ms. Pruitt's room.
Remember my last post, when we were talking about the way writing a portrait poem teaches compassion and empathy? I love how Gracie stepped out of her third grade experience to write this cosmopolitan, emotional poem.

Gracie F.

The Note to My Husband

With my hand on my chin, I think about my husband far, far away in California while I’m in Paris. I write to him, eat my lunch. I reach for my purse when I write to him how much I miss him. The waiter rushes past me to make a meal for a man in a top hat. I finish my note to my husband in California and I’m in Paris, France. Oh, how I miss him.

Although she wrote in response to the same work of art, the woman is Ellie's poem has a more active character. I wonder what the speaker is going to write about.

Ellie M.

Can’t Think of Anything

I’m sitting at a booth at the diner
On the corner of Mulberry Street.
I’ve had some wine, a whole glass in fact,
And still can’t think of anything.
My blonde hair in a bun, also
My black dress and lace cuffs.
Have to get the poem done
Before the ball.
A light bulb has gone off in my brain.
I think I’ll go pay the bill
And go home, but oh,
I just thought of something to write.

Phillip wrote in response to a Shonto Begay illustration that we've seen before. (The werewolf poems were among the most popular at our open  house.)

Phillip W.

Mysteries at Night

Night holds many mysteries
I am turning into a werewolf
It is midnight
I am not happy about it
I am changing fast
I was forced to be a werewolf
I will look for a meal
I will join a pack
I will howl at the moon
I will find a home
I will miss being a human
Now darkness is my friend
I sleep during the day
I have to go

I think the pack sees me.

And here is how my day ended, with gorgeous pink roses to add to the peonies from my garden. The smaller flowers are called Coral Bells.



Thanks for another great year of poetry, Northfield ES!

Today's Poetry Friday host is my dear friend Tabatha at The Opposite of Indifference. Have fun recharging your poetry batteries with some great offerings today.

Friday, October 26, 2012

Poetry Friday: DeShawn Days

At Author Amok, we've spent most of October with poet and children's author Tony Medina.

Two of the books I featured are picture books -- verse biographies of two figures who are heroes to many: Langston Hughes (my post about Love to Langston is here) and Bob Marley (and the post about I and I Bob Marley is here).

Medina's latest book of poems for young people, out any day now, is THE PRESIDENT LOOKS LIKE ME, a kids' view of another man for this history books, President Obama.

Published by Just Us Books.

Tony will be here next week for an interview about the new book. Meanwhile...

I'd like to share a Medina book that is a huge favorite with kids. From time to time, Tony posts on Facebook about his Skype visits with school-children, usually boys, who *love* DESHAWN DAYS. They ask Tony questions about DeShawn as if he were a real person, because the character does feel real.


DeShawn Days
Illustrated by R. Gregory Christie.

DeShawn isn't a famous poet or musician. He's a ten year old kid growing up in the projects. Through loosely styled poems of place, odes and portraits, DeShawn shows the reader who he is, who he loves, and what his life is like. (A classroom guide is here -- thanks Lee & Low Books!)

(Side note: this book was designed by my friend, author/illustrator Christy Hale of THE EAST WEST HOUSE.)

There are so many poems in this book that I loved, and that have strong kid-appeal. With Tony's permission, I am sharing this one. I hope it gives you a taste of DeShawn's voice.
DeShawn raps with his cousin, Tiffany.

I Love Rap
by Tony Medina
from DESHAWN DAYS

I love rap
not just 'cause of the beats
that make you move your feet
                       but the words
'cause they talk about reality
'cause they talk about me
and my block

I love rap and I love rhyming
and sometimes I be timing
Tiffany when she's on the mike
and I'm the deejay wavin' my hands
in the air scratchin' make-believe records

But I'm not lesser 'cause I use
the top of my mother's dresser
                                        'cause

I love rap
and I love rhyming
in front of the mirror
making believe I'm in a video
          wearing a baseball cap
          and my uncle's shades
and when I let my hair grow out
I'll have me some braids
and when I get older and bolder
I'll learn how to break dance
          with my legs in the air
          kicking like propellers
standing on my hands
bustin' out rhymes
with Tiff and the fellas

Poem posted with permission of Tony Medina. All rights reserved. Thanks, Tony. 

Kids won't be surprised -- since DeShawn feels so real -- that the character has a lot in common with Tony Medina.
Tony visits with elementary schoolers.
Tony writes in an afterword, "I come from a similar world as DeShawn. I was a skinny brown boy from the projects with asthma, an active imagination, and a grandmother who was there for me... Every other day I wanted to be something different: a construction worker, a sailor, a movie star, a comedian, a lawyer, you name it."

Tony was turned on to reading and writing by Daniel Keyes' book Flowers for Algernon. He says, "A writer is a great thing to be because you get to paint pictures, tell stories, create worlds, and express your feeling, all with words."

Friends -- if you have not participated in the "Next Big Thing Blog Hop" yet and are interested, please let me know. My "Next Big Thing" post is here. Send me an email if you'd like to answer the questions and be one of my linkees.

Get out there and find all of the pictures, stories, worlds and emotions poets are sharing today. (I'm sure there will be plenty of costumes, frights and Halloween candy too.) It's Poetry Friday! Our host is Linda B. at Teacher Dance.
Candy Corn Popcorn Balls from myrecipes.com

I will be driving -- ahead of the storm, I hope -- to the Poconos today, for a retreat with poet Michael Glaser. But I hope to sample lots of poetry goodies before I leave and when I return.

Saturday, June 4, 2011

Teaching Voice, Part Two

Open a children's novel and you'll know by the end of the first page whether the narrator hooks you or not. (For a great example, read the opening of Shiloh.)


Creating a narrative voice is a difficult skill to teach kids. There are elements to consider such as diction, tone, word choice. You could make yourself crazy with character-building worksheets.

When I'm working with school-age kids, jumping right in works better. I do some modeling (my full workshop description is here), the kids choose a photo or art-print featuring a person, and we get writing.

Yesterday, I posted two third grade poems. One was in the voice of Lady Gaga. The other described a girl caught in a fantasy phenomenon.

In honor of Saturday, when a lot of my students play sports, I'm sharing two poems in the voice of professional athletes.

There is a detail about the setting that Joey does not reveal until the end of his poem. Read "The Shot" and see how he times this information to add impact to the storyline.

The Shot
by Joey S.
Grade 3

I am watching if I make the shot or not.
I have a perfect release. I know it will spin a lot.
This shot is for the win for the  NBA championship.
If I make it, my team wins, or if I don't
I will let my team down.
I am terrified. I am not a great three
Point shooter. The crowd is roaring.
They hope I miss the shot in the end.
I make the shot and I silence the crowd.

Chase's poem vividly captures an athlete obsessed with winning. Listen for the rhythm and repeated phrases in this poem. Those elements build the voice of "The Boxer."

The Boxer
by Chase T.
Grade 3

I am warming up for my fight.
I put on my boxing gloves. 10 minutes until the fight.
I will practice and practice. I will not stop.
Two minutes left. I will win this thing. I will
Not back out. I will  not stop.
I will jump rope. I will punch a punching bag.
The fight is now. I will be fighting
The world’s best boxer. He won twenty
Medals in a row.
It is now. I will fight and fight until I
Win. I will  not stop until I win.
Maybe I win or I will lose. It is your
Choice. Do you think I will win or I will lose?
“He wins!”

More portrait poems coming soon, followed by a guest post with my high school intern, Alissa Bennett of St. Paul's School.

Friday, June 3, 2011

Poetry Friday: Teaching Voice


It happens at every writers' conference. An audience member asks the guest editor or agent what he looks for in a book. He says, "Voice."

"How would you define voice?" is the follow up question. Answers range from a succinct non-answer, "I know it when I hear it," to a rambling response while the agent squirms in her seat.

Voice is difficult to define, yet as readers we do have an ear for when a character's voice sounds true to itself.

Voice is also part of the 6+1 Writing Traits curriculum. So how do you teach it?

This school year, I brought back a lesson in portrait poems, using fine art images and magazine clippings for inspiration. The full portrait poem lesson is here.

Since I last posted the lesson, I've used PF blogger Amy LV's "Face Poem" as an additional model. 

The students get really into it! First, we look at an image and talk about the facts we see. Next, we spend time imagining -- what's this person's story. (One of my Northfield third grade classes imagined that the grandfather in Amy's picture was a time traveler and the baby he held was himself.) Last, we read and discuss the accompanying poem.

When it's time to write, we follow the same steps. Facts first, then imagination. I can't explain why it works, but it does.

My intern from St. Paul's School for Girls, (hi, Alissa!) and I were whispering about the poem, "A Quote from Gaga" in the back of the classroom. How does a third grader step outside of her own experience and write in the voice of a superstar?

A Quote from Gaga 
by Madi M.
Grade 3

Stylist! Stylist!
Where are you?!
I need a new outfit
For my photo shoot.
I need you to shop
‘Til you drop!
I need a new motorcycle
As a prop.
I need bright red lipstick
and shiny black kicks.
I need long black gloves,
And please, no doves.
My hair needs to be teased
And I need stockings to cover my knees.
The table is out of forks
And I need my black shorts.
I need my hair dyed
And none of this will be denied.
Did you just say, “No?”
Well!
You’re not invited to my show!
Hah!

Mackenzie brought an unusual image with her. The opening lines describe the magazine clipping she used. Then, the poem led Mackenzie into a fantasy scenario.  What an imagination. This poem is written in third person (both first and third were options for the portrait poems).

Untitled
by Mackenzie D.
Grade 3

Putting her hand in a green
glowing ball, wanting to have done
this all her life.
Touching it, feeling a hard
but soft thing, making the whole thing glow.
The light shining down
making the ball brighter.
Lines seem to burst out, but
go back in.
Sparks shooting out like a fire.
Her shirt’s already green, but it
seems as if the glow makes it greener.
Everyone crowding around her now,
wanting to do the same.
She gets bigger and bigger as
she takes her hand out,
then she gets smaller.

I will post more portrait poems over the next few days. Thanks again to Northfield Elementary and its families for giving me permission to share the students' amazing work.