In Residence: Once Again, with Feeling!

Greetings, Writerly Friends.

I am continuing my series of posts from Northfield Elementary School, where I am in residence this month.

In writing poetry with elementary schoolers, I'm looking for every opportunity *I* have to compliment the students. Their rough drafts might include a descriptive detail that the reader can visualize, an imaginative idea, onomatopoeia that pops, or a jazzy rhythm. Today I'm sharing three Northfield poems that stood out for their energy.

What is energy in a poem? It's a combination of an enthusiastic voice and natural rhythm. I can't teach that. The poet has to hear it in his or her head.

But first, let's talk about stanzas.

One of the most useful tools -- and possibly overlooked -- tools in poetry is the stanza. Not only are stanzas a way of organizing our thoughts, they can also be used to create rhythm, and to make a poem visually interesting by balancing print and white space on the page.

Try this next time you're revising a poem: rewrite the poem in couplets, then tercets, then quatrains. You might find a stanza length that works well, but this technique can also reveal places where your language needs tightening up, or highlight internal rhymes.

The Northfield third graders are focusing on the stanza as tool for organizing their poems. We keep it simple, writing opposites poems that have two stanzas.

The model poem for this lesson is Elizabeth Coatsworth's "Swift Things Are Beautiful." You can visit this post to read a poem walk -- which gives details on how I guide students through a discussion of the poem.

If you'd like to read a full description of my stanzas workshop, here is Teaching Stanzas Part One and Teaching Stanzas Part Two (with poem walk).

Imaginary and Real Animals
by Hayley R.

Real animals are beautiful.
A dog on a silent moonlight night.
A panda eating bamboo all day long.
A hamster spinning on its wheel.
A monkey swinging on a tree.

Imaginary animals are beautiful:
Pegasus flying in a great story.
A dragon has fiery breath.
A vampire's white face turning into a bat.
A phoenix, that red fiery bird, flying through the night.

"That red fiery bird, flying through the night."

Read about this mythological bird at Wikipedia.

Jacob's poem is an example of how feeling and energy make a poem fun to read.

Up and Down
by Jacob B.

The clouds are up.
The birds are up
The sky is up at the top.
The tree goes up too.

We are down on the ground.
A house is down too.
Animals are stuck down here too.
Clouds drop down with the rest.

"A house is down too."

Orchard House, home where
Louisa May Alcott wrote Little Women.

Connor chose such a unique topic for his opposite poem, I had to share it with you. I love the sense of humor here.

Sizes
by Connor B.

Being short is fun:
You can hide in hide and seek,
crawl into bushes and get the ball,
sneak around and steal a cookie,
and get to the front of a group easier.

Being tall is fun:
You can look over people,
run faster in races,
kick harder in kickball,
touch people out in swimming,
and keep the ball away from anyone you want.

"Sneak around and steal a cookie."

Have you tried this recipe?

Thanks once again to the Northfield educators and families for giving me permission to share the students' work.

Tomorrow, we'll look at opposite poems about animals.

I See the Stars at Night: A Lesson in Opposites

How do we get our bearings in a poem? Is the action set in the day or night? Is the emotion happy or sad? Are the people or animals in the poem working or resting?

One way to organize our thoughts in a poem−and to help readers find their way−is to use stanzas.

At Northfield, the third graders know that stanzas in a poem operate much like paragraphs in regular writing.

“Stanza” is the Italian word for “room.” (Read about the word's origins here.) 

I ask students to imagine that I am welcoming them into my house. We talk about what they would see in the front hall, the kitchen, even the bathroom (that gets a few giggles). 

So why would poetry borrow that word stanza? Because, one of the students will share, reading a poem with several stanzas is like walking into the different rooms of a house.

Since the third graders know we are doing opposites poems today, they quickly figure out exactly how many stanzas our poems will have.

Next, we brainstorm pairs of opposites on the blackboard. Some favorite topics for this poem are: delicious and disgusting, summer and winter, home and school, old and young, real and imaginary animals, night and day, hot and cold, busy and lazy, fast and slow.

Fast and slow is the topic of the model poem I use on opposites day. The poem and the guts of this lesson were shared with me by poet-in-the-schools Rosanne Singer. She was my mentor poet.

(Artists coming into the MD State Arts Council school residency program student teach. We accompany an artist on one residency, observing first and picking up classes throughout the week.)

Swift Things Are Beautiful

Swift things are beautiful:

Swallows and deer,

And lightning that falls

Bright-veined and clear,

Rivers and meteors,

Wind in the wheat,

The strong-withered horse,

The runner’s sure feet.

And slow things are beautiful:

The closing of day,

The pause of the wave

That curves downward to spray,

The ember that crumbles,

The opening flower,

And the ox that moves on

In the quiet of power.

by Elizabeth Coatsworth, author of The Cat Who Went to Heaven, 1931 Newbery winner.

At Goodreads.

Students love to pick out their favorite lines in this poem. We look at our hands and say, “Veins really do look like lightning!”

We pat ourselves on the back between the shoulders because that’s where our withers would be if we were horses.

One year, I had a class that was particularly taken with the line "The closing of day." I brought their teacher the Jane Kenyon poem "Let Evening Come" so they might further explore the idea of light and shadows settling at dusk.

Embers often need some explanation, but enough children have been camping or have fireplaces at home that they recognize the glowing coals, once they are described.

Someone always brings up the wonderful last two lines.

Because our culture equates power with speed, the slow, powerful ox creates a great discussion. The students often bring up other slow, powerful animals: tortoises that live over 100 years, elephants. This year, one boy mentioned that glaciers are slow and powerful. I'd never thought of that before. The class added the concept of slow, powerful water, using the Grand Canyon as an example of a gradual but powerful change to a landscape.

Thanks again to the Northfield community for giving me permission to share the third graders' wonderful poems.

I love the way Emma uses description in her poem so that we can guess which animals she's talking about even though she doesn't name them.

Emma B.

It Is OK to Be Big

It is OK to be big

If you have a long trunk,

Or a long body to keep you swimming,

Maybe a long neck to reach high,

A big body to keep babies safe.

It is okay to be big!

It is okay to be small

If you have a shell to keep you safe,

Or a small squeak for your mom,

Maybe you can hide really well.

If you fly very high you are safe.

It is OK to be small!

"A big body to keep babies safe." From Kangroos.Org

Evan's poem reminds me of "Let Evening Come." He shows the busyness of day, contrasted with the slowing down, peaceful feeling of night.

Evan M.

Day is so fun:

Go outside and run,

Go play rugby in the grass,

Go to the park with friends,

Put up a lemonade stand,

Hear the birds chirp,

Go inside at the end of the day.

I see the stars at night:

After a long day

In the sun, after a day

With my friends,

Go inside and eat

Dinner with my family,

And then go to bed, read a good book

Then say goodnight

To the world in your bed. 

I loved the conclusion of Andrew's poem. The inside fun stanza includes things my family enjoys doing together.

Andrew P.

Outside, Inside

Playing outside is fun:

Like climbing the stairs

Of the tree house,

Spinning in circles

On the tire swing,

And climbing to the

Tippy top of

The trees.

Inside is fun also:

Rolling the dice in

Board games like Sorry,

Dancing around in

Charades,

And watching a movie on

Family movie night.

I hope your Mother's Day was both fun and peaceful, everyone. I'll post more third grade opposites poems tomorrow.

Free printable vintage Mother's Day Cards!

Teaching Stanzas Part 2

Happy Poetry Friday!

I've been working on opposites poems with the Northfield third graders. Earlier, we did some warm ups and learned about stanzas (see the post here). Today, let's walk through the model poem.

First, we take a quick look at the poems. Since we're working on opposites, and opposites come in pairs, the third graders are expecting two parts, or stanzas.

Swift Things Are Beautiful

by Elizabeth Coatsworth

Swift things are beautiful:
Swallows and deer,
And lightning that falls
Bright-veined and clear,
Rivers and meteors, (5)
Wind in the wheat,
The strong-withered horse,
The runner's sure feet.

And slow things are beautiful:
The closing of day, (10)
The pause of the wave
That curves downward to spray,
The ember that crumbles,
The opening flower,
And the ox that moves on (15)
In the quiet of power.

When I was studying how to teach, our Methods professor encouraged us to write a list of  "hoped-for answers" to prepare for a poem discussion.

I ask the children to volunteer favorite lines, things that sound good to their ears, or part that feel confusing. Usually, they cover my "hoped-for answers" list and add new ideas.

Line 2: Children do find this line beautiful, thought not all know what a swallow is. I share that the bird is known for being an acrobatic flier. (And they frequent a nearby park.)

Lines 3-4: This section always comes up! I ask the students to look at the back of their hands or inside of their wrists. If we look at the veins there, we can see how they are shaped like lightning. What an amazing comparison the author is making.

Line 6: We talk about the idea that wind is invisible, it is the effect of wind moving that we can see. The wind can transform a field of grass into an undulating ocean.

Line 7: I  had to look up "withered" myself. Here, I have everyone give him or herself a pat on the back. The spot that we're patting, between the shoulder blades, would be our withers if we were horses.

horse-pros.com

Line 8: The idea is that "sure feet" communicates the smooth motion of an experienced runner. This line doesn't always come up, in which case I skip it.

Line 9: Later, I'll encourage the poets to use Coatsworth's strategy here. While this is not a refrain, the opening lines of each stanza are similar and introduce the topic.

Line 10: It's a thrill to have a nine-year-old boy or girl describe why s/he loves this line. This year, one of the boys described the image of the shifting shadows as the sun goes down. I sometimes offer Jane Kenyon's poem "Let Evening Come" as an extension for this line.

Line 11-12: For years, I've been talking with children about a crashing wave and how it pauses for a second or two as it crests. This year, Ms. Grim offered a new interpretation -- the tunnel of a wave that surfers ride.

Line 13: Often, we need to define ember. Most children are familiar with campfires or fireplace fires, so we can talk about the beautiful, glowing coals and how they slowly crumble to ash as the fire goes out.

Lines 15-16: We spend the most time on these two lines. I remind the students that a poet often puts the most important idea near the end of the poem, because it's the thought the reader is left with. We define "ox" if needed. I ask them what they think about the idea of something slow being powerful. Our culture usually equates power with speed -- race cars, rocket ships, the cheetah. Can a slow thing be powerful?

Before we read the poem one more time (to hear it as a whole after discussing its parts), I ask the children if they can find the overall theme. Yes, we are talking about fast and slow, but it is fast and slow things in nature that the poem focuses on. They get it!

This sounds like a lot when I write it up. But the children are so quick -- we usually cover all of these ideas in a fifteen minute discussion.

Before we move on to writing our own opposites poems, I'll usually read a few student samples from past years. Those who like to brainstorm can use a simple T-chart for this poem, listing three or more examples for each opposite.

Thanks again to Northfield's staff and families for sharing today's poems!

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Treats

by Colin E.

Sweet things are very tasty!

Like bubble gum popping in my  mouth

And Popsicles melting on my hand and falling on the floor.

And caramel melting in my mouth and tasting oh, so sweet.

And sour things are tasty too!

Like Sweet Tarts that make me pucker just like sour lemonade.

And Sour Patch Kids that me me twitch

  and make me beg for more.

At last the Green Apples, which my brother really hates

but they just make me feel so happy and let me smile with glee.

This next student poem is challenging because of the subject matter. However, it ends on a note of hope that I find beautiful. (I had asked the student to think of something he might contrast with the tanks in stanza one.)

War & Peace

Wars are bad...

fighting with other people

people dying and families crying

long black and bloody days of war

tanks are destroying after

destroying other things

Peace is good...

non-fighting with other people

people that are free and nobody's dying

no black and bloody days with other people

hang-gliders are peacefully flying

Summer and Winter

by Emily H.

Summer is fun:

You swim at the pool

Slap a volleyball at the beach

Surfing on a bright green wave

My aunt Michelle's boathouse is so fun

While we wolf down ice cream before it melts

Winter is fun, too:

Having snowball fights

We're bundled up with hats and gloves

Sledding over crisp and clear snow

The snow angels are beautiful

Christmas brings us presents

While we sip warm hot chocolate

After we eat the cold snow.

Randy's poem tells a story.

Land & Water

by Randy S.

Let's take a splash.

Manatees swim freely through the waters of Crystal River.

Dolphins make a splash into the ocean blue.

Octopi bounce around in the Marina.

Look a jellyfish. Ouch, it stung me!

Hopefully that crab doesn't get influenced.

I should probably scream 'cause here comes a shark.

We're back on land.

Now I'm back on land, blue sky overhead.

Green grass swaying in the wind.

I have to get back home to tend to my cockapoo.

Squirrels flying through the trees as I walk up the driveway.

Boo-boo comes flying to the door.

I'm glad to be home.

Today's Poetry Friday post is wonderful Irene Latham -- stop by for more poetry links.

Teaching Stanzas Part 1

This month, I am in residence at Northfield Elementary School.

One of the lessons the third grade team likes to do with their students is on stanzas. Thanks to fellow Maryland State Arts Council artist-in-residence Rosanne Singer, who shared a version of this lesson with me in my early days with the program.

The skills we aim for in this lesson are organizing ideas and working within a theme. We use opposites to make it simple. Since opposites comes in pairs, the children quickly understand that our poems with have two parts. For some writers, the result will be a two-part list poem. Other will extend this to add descriptions -- active verbs, setting, vivid adjectives.

Dark and light is one suggested topic for this poem.

In poetry, we have something like paragraphs to organize ideas. The fancy poetry word is "stanza."

I love the word stanza because it means "room" in Italian. Therefore, when you read a poem with multiple stanzas, you can imagine walking through the rooms of a house. Each room is organized around its own purpose and contains the appropriate items. You wouldn't keep your blender in the bathroom, right? (For a poem on this topic, see Robin Hirsch's "You Enter a Poem," from the fabulous book, FEG.)

I use a cooperative activity to help the students brainstorm opposites. It's a little matching game. 

Everyone gets a card with one half of an opposite  face-down on his or her desk. The card might say "Night" or "Big" or "Delicious." I explain that during this quiet activity, each student must find his or her partner (Day, Small, Disgusting). Once they've found each other, the pair will write their opposite words on the board. I time them, just for fun, and make it a competition between the classes. The world record is 24 seconds. Most classes can do it under 45 seconds -- a good indicator of how well they can work together.

We talk about these word pairs and how they might be developed into a poem. This is how I sneak in the idea of a theme. So, the Night/Day poem might be about nocturnal and diurnal animals, or "things I like to do" at night time and in the day. The Big/Small poem lends itself to animals or nature. Delicious/Disgusting would be about food.

We might take a few minutes to generate additional opposites. Over the years, students have come up with some great ideas: wild vs. tame animals, real vs. mythological creatures, boring vs. exciting, happy and sad.

The mighty, mythological griffin.

I'll post more of the lesson tomorrow. Here are a few of the third grade poems to whet your appetite. Thanks to the Northfield staff and families for giving me permission to share the poems.

Yummy & Disgusting

by Matt B.

Yummy food

Spaghetti is awesome dances

in my tummy, ice cream so freezing

I'm Frosty the Snowman. Soda, I can

slurp. I just need MORE!

Disgusting food

Onions, oh Onions, if there is one I

must throw up. Sauerkraut is very

weird, the shape, the taste, oh god

do I have to eat it? Cabbage is wet

it makes my hand soggy.

Thanks, wikipedia.

Fun in the Sun

by Owen B.

In the summer you

go swimming with

the sun beating

on you. Sandcastle

building at the beach.

Plants growing taller

than you. Watering your

plants instead of school.

In the winter it's cold

when you're in the snow

when it's so white with

the quiet wind blowing

in your face.

Dry & Wet

by Bridget T.

Dry things are fun:

tanning in the hot sun pouring

down on you.

Walking in the warm sand.

Lying on a warm towel.

Wet things are awesome:

the big ocean.

The icy soda in your hands.

The cold hose on your

sink to wash the sand

off of your skin.

Tomorrow, Part 2 of the lesson and more wonderful third grade poems.